Karoline Borelli (Italy)

flaming hail …
a small bee
wasting time

Comment: a haiku with a regular metric pattern (3-3-3 syllables) that plays on an impactful contrast. The violent hailstorm (kōhyō 降ひょう) in the first ku is therefore juxtaposed to the (forced) idleness of a bee in the second one, while the ellipsis (ie, the cutting mark or kireji 切れ字) seems to reproduce the hailstones lying on the ground, making the whole scene even more engaging. The simplicity of the language (kanso 簡素) allows the poet to convey her message immediately and with no filters.

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