Billy Antonio (Philippines)

Haiku

the dwindling woodpile
father’s last
breaths

Comment: a mournful and emotional piece of word that associates the desolation of a winter landscape with the father’s last moments of life. The unmarked cut (kire 切れ) at the end of the first line reinforces this link, while the structure (tsuzukegara 続けがら) of the poem itself makes the reader get an idea of depletion and inescapable ending.

Published by Luca Cenisi

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7 thoughts on “Billy Antonio (Philippines)”

  1. It is an honor to be featured in Harusame. Thank you, Luca Cenisi, for your insights and for the opportunity to share my words.

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  4. the dwindling woodpile
    father’s last
    breaths

    Billy Antonio

    Good example of when a strong enjambment can really work in a haiku. Love the opening line, which can tug so many of our memories, if we’ve encountered wood-burning fires in homes or refreshment areas.

    Great work!

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    1. Thank you, Alan! I appreciate your comment. I am also glad that you enjoyed it.

      Sincerely,
      Billy

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